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Late Comment If to be ignored, why gets the person in question such a fine woven text? Is the strange influence so disturbing, that an exasperate writer takes notes against his will? Good for the reader, because the words come over quite nice, though I do not easily get their meaning. A nagging voice, echoing through all times, derives from a person maybe dead already. Because „out of elementary bounds“ the more powerful the phrases. I looked up „haze“ to make shure I get a correct translation. I found: smoke, dust etc. in the air that reduces visibility, slight confusion or vagueness of mind. And: punish, humiliate, harass by forcing to do hard and unnecessary work.
The scene transports an idea of guilt, we have no knowledge of, because the writers past relationship to the voices origin is not revealed to us. Now he cannot get rid of a ghostly spirits echoing voice. That is probably why the earth beneath his feet feels dirty (soil) and his grasp of reality but feeble, that is shallow in his mind. I can only hope to do the poem justice. I liked it well. mcberry